Paint with Light

I read this article in Strobist.com about using a cellphone flash light as a light source in low light situation. I think this is something cool to try out. So I set up my camera and pulled the exposure time to maximum and start to "paint" my shoes with my cellphone's flash light. Anyway I added a SB-600 in the set up, hiding it at the back of the shoes to add some backlighted effect.
And here you go...my another attempt on product shot :)

Again, I have two versions of it:
The first one, unedited version (just some basic Raw processing in Lightroom)

And another enhanced version

Please let me know which version you prefer, thanks :)